Summer Love
Author
BayBay
Source
Wattpad
Overall Rating
Spelling
6/10
Four errors.
Plot Development
5/10
So what's going on here?
Originality
5/10
An overused plot
Grammar
8/10
Capitalize your I's!
Character Development
9/10
I got to know the characters fairly well.
Hooking (grabbing the reader)
8/10
The first line drew me in, but not because it was in all caps.
Verb Tenses
6/10
I yelled
I have
Overall Rating
7/10
Good. . .but the plot is overused and it needs to be edited.
Comments
- Please, just don't use caps. It hurts everyone's eyes and is just a no-no in writing.
- The story feels too rushed, but you can slooowww it down by using more descriptions.
- Here is an excerpt from a line from the story:: 'went down to the kitchen to fix me some breakfast' What the heck was up with that?! Fix me some breakfast. REALLY? Change it.
- I know she likes him, and I know that she blushes a lot when she's around him, so stop repeating that.
- There needs to be more description, I want to be able to be in the room with her!
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